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fraido
Fri May 19 00:39:29 2017

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My Review of The Park by Silverblue
Close your eyes
I read this a few times then closed my eyes and all I read appered in my mind. The imagery is fantastic, set with a nice moderate pace to take the reader through each segment. Superb and uplifting. Thank you!

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fraido
Thu May 18 16:55:10 2017

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My Review of Hymn To The Rising Sun by ALEXJLOCKWOOD
Expected
Religious words follow a similar tone where platitudes follow platitudes.

I respect the belief, but as a poem it lacks originality and premise. There's no doubt you have skills as a writer and I look forward to reading more of your work.
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fraido
Thu May 18 16:49:34 2017

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My Review of Familiar Feeling by Silverblue
Rich in emotion
This has everything, and clearly refers to a person and experiences the author has witnessed first hand. The readers journey is as full of the ups and downs as the subject, in a carefully controlled route.
Just superb. Thank you
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fraido
Tue May 16 02:30:32 2017

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My Review of Creativity's First Draft by odinroark
Renewed
Everyone a writer puts one to paper they are begining anew. Fresh ideas, confuse and overwhelm the thoughts until order is brought through writing.
I love this piece, thank you.
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fraido
Tue May 16 02:28:29 2017

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My Review of Fulfillment by JohnCreekmore
Insightful
A very moving piece on the error of seeking jewels when what we already have is a kings ransom in contrast.

It makes me think, precisely what poetry should do. Thank you.
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fraido
Tue May 9 17:42:30 2017

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My Review of Wept by Silverblue
Ambiguous
I mean that word as a compliment. I can see this as a murders confession, a lovers regret or an observers tale of comeuppance. Any of those fit the tale because it's so well written.

Yen I enjoyed that thank you!
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fraido
Wed Dec 9 11:48:28 2015

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My Review of Forsaken by bickerstaffe
Different
Different, novel, a very unusual but challenging topic to cover.

I loved it's difference and its imagery.

Thanks
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fraido
Wed Dec 9 10:18:09 2015

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My Review of This love aches by SC2028
Feel the pain
Your work really demonstrates the pain of unrequited love.

Loved it! Just ease off the bottle ok
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fraido
Wed Dec 9 06:05:52 2015

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My Review of Sentient Morn by TonyD
Beautiful
A terrific piece, the lines:-

"leaning soldiers in vast array,
saluting sun in arc of day."

just fantastic. You have a descriptive gift that I'm delighted to have read, and will re-read again and again (like your other work).

Thank you!
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fraido
Wed Dec 9 05:44:00 2015

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My Review of Beginnings Small by TonyD
Thought provoking
This demands more than one reading, and on each one something different emerges.

I'll be exploring the universe through these words in the weeks ahead.

Thank you!
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fraido
Sat Oct 17 16:32:19 2015

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My Review of the discomfort of this cradle by cloudgoth
Conflict
Yeh you're not really sure what way you want to go in this piece. Skyward or earthbound?

I liked this, it's an argument up front with self. Who won?

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fraido
Sat Oct 17 16:26:17 2015

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My Review of Relieve Me by Deedee27
Story well told
The headline speaks.

I'd consider the rhythm of the poem, in places its fluent, in others slightly clunky, but despite this the poem says a great deal, and very well!
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fraido
Tue Jan 6 00:15:35 2015

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My Review of Alone, with Pen by TonyD
Really!
I'd never considered our art in this way before, and became metaphorically submerged in the process.

I loved it, especially the line:-

"Words begin to soar, find flight within the shadows,
and render thoughts like colors to a canvas."

Excellent!

Thanks for giving meaning to our madness.
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fraido
Tue Jan 6 00:10:29 2015

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My Review of "I" by Valentine
Beautiful
The words, meaning, timing & emotion conveyed were stunning.

I haven't been online for a while, but I am so glad I came on when I did otherwise I might have missed this!

Perfect.
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fraido
Tue Aug 12 17:10:57 2014

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My Review of The Disastrous Traffic Stop by EltonCamp
Intriguing
Very interesting especially the two line paragraphs.

I'm not sure if it works. I've read it quite a few times and the story and humour is there and nicely put, put the pace is fragmented in places.

A review/few amendments would really do this piece justice.
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fraido
Tue May 27 18:33:27 2014

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My Review of The School Bus Revolt by richom
Quirky
I'm loving the variety of topics that spill from that imagination.

I'm not sure in what order this piece comes in your repertoire, but it stands up very well with the other gems I've read.

Again (and a year overdue!) well done.
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fraido
Tue May 27 18:17:16 2014

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My Review of Go Green by richom
Do it!
The colour would suit you, and add youthful appearance to a youthful soul.

Needless to say I loved this. Vibrant and vivid, and well green all over.

Great stuff.
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fraido
Mon May 19 16:44:00 2014

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My Review of The Poet's Wife by SandraMartyres
True
I really liked this, although the style isn't one I'm attracted to.

The content is superb and well crafted and overall it was a joy to read.

Thanks
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fraido
Mon May 19 16:39:23 2014

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My Review of The Plight of Height by richom
Chuckle!
Captivating, funny, different, sad, emotionally trying (for tall people)!

What else can I say except I loved it

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fraido
Mon May 19 16:28:03 2014

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My Review of Lessons by LPMx
Original
My first visit back in a while and I read this gem.

Very thought provoking, well written and considered.

Thanks!
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fraido
Fri Nov 29 21:00:54 2013

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My Review of A Poem in Winter by SanExpeditus
Teleportation
For a time I was transported to the winter chilled valley's of Newcastle, patiently waiting for the snow to fall, crisp and cold sharp, to the ground.
Concentrating on technique can cause the flow and natural development of a poem to be stilted and artificial, not letting the work go to where it wants to. Not so in this case. It flowed effortlessly and was a joy to read.

I do however confess to an aversion to old English in poems, but although this poem could have attracted it, I'm so glad it was avoided (apart from o'er which I'll give you 😉.

It works, and it works very well!

Sets me up nicely for putting the tree up!
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fraido
Fri Nov 29 20:40:02 2013

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My Review of James Cecil Horton November 28th, 2015 by annalame
Thoughts
My words mean nothing to your loss, and the love you've expressed so beautifully to your son.

He knows, he hears, he waits too.

Be strong.
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fraido
Fri Nov 29 20:32:47 2013

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My Review of Sometimes by snulf
Honest
Honest, what your work is all about.

You don't try to be arty, use fancy words or rhyme, you speak from the soul in a way that connects. This particular piece is very raw, and the phrase "silence bleeding from you veins" ironically cries out to me.

Loved it.
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fraido
Fri Nov 15 16:44:53 2013

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My Review of Severed by SanExpeditus
Powerful
The imagery that starts this piece sets the standard for the rest of it.

Very very good, and extremely sad. It's clear his loss touched you deeply to cause such inspiration.
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fraido
Wed Nov 13 18:02:25 2013

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My Review of The Sea of Dreams by peecee
It says a lot
There's a considerable amount said in this poem. It will take a few re-reads to understand the imagery and importantly, the message.

I wasn't pulled in by the structure, but the language was very fresh and imaginative.

Thanks!
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