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stellarram
Tue Dec 13 21:10:32 2016

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My Review of A Hole: Pain Through The Brain by sicky666x
Nice Try
In just 8 lines, you had me interested. A guy got a hole in his throat because of a weird magic; possibly by a witch or magician. I can sense his fear and tension. Nicely written; but you could've easily developed it into a full fledged story based poem. You have a way with words. Hence, you can certainly improve. I felt interested and incomplete as well; so only I am stopping with 3. Sorry for that!
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stellarram
Tue Dec 13 21:04:55 2016

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My Review of Aggressive Shadows by Archia
Smooth!
A very good flow and theme. The situation of the guy meeting girl might seem a bit cliched; but I can sense the good intention of the characters right till the end. If you could have really tweaked the climax a bit; like the guy is a writer who is writing a story and the girl is really just a character on paper; where in the guy being a shy and passive person who feels awkward around women and did not talk to the girl. Then he came home and wrote the story just how he would have wanted it; with the promotion of him being a confident guy; where in reality, he isn't. That is just my view. However, I enjoyed the story quite easily. Thanks for sharing!

Warm Regards,
SR.
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stellarram
Sun Dec 11 18:14:20 2016

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My Review of The Sweater by odinroark
Very Well Written!
Dear Odin,

A truly perfect piece of writing about the Veteran, his struggles, his good and bad times, the lives and losses he had seen and so many other subtle messages. My favorite lines are these:

"And like the tattered loyal sweater,
Judges not the body,
But dutifully complies,
Abiding the ever shrinking collapse
Of life fully lived. "

You can improve on style a bit more is my humble opinion. But this poem's beauty is in its simplicity and its striking theme. For these reasons, it deserves five. Thanks for sharing!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Mon Apr 6 12:25:15 2015

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My Review of Under The Dark Sky by umaldrin
A very deep Work
I can realize the pain and search in your words. Longing, yearning, craving are the words which are suddenly coming to my mind. Loneliness makes us to passionately wish for our dreams; which is what I think your work had clearly depicted. I really love the sad but deep style of this Poem. Well done!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Mon Apr 6 12:23:16 2015

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My Review of Steps by TonyD
Powerful
A very well constructed, hard hitting poem about redemption. Human beings realize that the steps which they need to take with regards to improving their lives must be determined based on what is their moral entitlement. I think this poem presses on that theme really well. Nice work!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Mon Apr 6 12:21:26 2015

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My Review of The Stars in The Sea by Hansi
Beauty at its Best!
I can completely feel you. This sounds like a Poem which I had written. Amazing writing! We have too many common things, I can assure you on that! I think no other appreciations are needed.

Take care and may God bless you!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Mon Apr 6 12:18:41 2015

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My Review of Marvels Of The Divine by blossomwriter
Mouth-Watering!
Your explanation skills about eatables are really good. I enjoyed reading this Poem. Please use punctuations; which is the only feedback from my side. Having said that, this poem is a delight in all other categories. Choice of words, flow, theme and grammar, all are fine.

You made me think about my favorite dishes too. Keep it up! Rolling my lips....

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Fri Jan 23 06:50:54 2015

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My Review of The Test of Gods by TonyD
Amazing!
Dear TonyD,

Pretty enthralling piece with a good selection of words. Appreciable theme as well. Only one small suggestion, please take care of the upper case/lower case and punctuations; because it would be more fitting to such a beautiful work.

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Wed Oct 8 00:53:46 2014

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My Review of Writ in Stone by JohnCreekmore
Good!
Nice piece of work. The theme is very good. Flow of the poem, usage of words and punctuation marks could have been better. Having said that, this is a well thought out one.

Keep writing!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Wed Oct 8 00:50:00 2014

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My Review of Leave me not by Hansi
Brilliant!
I won't give 5 out of 5 that easily. But this one deserves it. Excellent piece of writing. Repetitions were used judicially. My favorite lines are: "You will catch the mourn
When you see the mountains
That we both love to climb"

One who can live, understand and associate with the mountains can live their life in a better way. I do see lot of pain behind this Poem. Don't worry, you will find yourself. I would like to read a happy smelling poem from you. Only area because of which I could have reduced a point is the usage of punctuation marks. But for the sheer brilliance of the Poem, I did'n't do it. Rest all are fine! Keep it up!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Fri Oct 3 21:23:33 2014

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My Review of The Mad Doctor by Angelquill
Beautiful
Dear Angelquill,

This was one such a pleasure to read. It resembled the theme which I follow in my own writings. The only reason why I didn't give is for this creative theme and the back story behind it; you could have gone for more bookish words which are tougher in nature.

Amazing piece of work, keep em coming. Especially, the cheerfulness of the transformed to go for a tour in the full moon night. Mesmerizing writing, keep it up!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Fri Oct 3 21:14:05 2014

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My Review of Sepia Faces by acecolette1
Good Start!
Dear Acecolette,

For a first timer, you did an admirable job. Theme and repetitions are good. This is the second time which I read today in which repetitions are executed well. Grammar and the flow can be improved a bit more. The family theme and the points you described were quite nice to read. Fine start, keep it up!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Fri Oct 3 21:10:12 2014

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My Review of My Battles my Wars by LisaBlackheart
Nice Work!
Dear Lisa,

One who experienced it only can write it well. Poem wise, the construction could have been much better. Having said that, even I too did not expect a sugar coating after reading your description. The theme of the poem was brought our precisely.

The repetition of the lines "Don't pick me up; let me lie" was spot-on. Most people don't know how to use this style but you did a good job. Keep writing. I pray and hope that you soon find your solace.

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Mon Sep 29 11:59:50 2014

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My Review of Mansion of a Catholic Priest by AutumnBurniston
Gleeful
What a writing piece! Can't really understand why People haven't reviewed it yet. I won't give five that easily but the underlying theme of positivism and the artistic way you explained it following the literary rules of a poem is simply outstanding.

"I was sought and a miss I fought
to protect her prophecy,
Wait-what?
Her name is Angel, but she looks a lot like me"

Fantastic lines. Thanks for sharing. Religious and blissful! Keep it up.

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.

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stellarram
Mon Sep 29 11:53:28 2014

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My Review of An Admirable Of Beauty by blossomwriter
Superb!
Except a slight grammatical change in the first line, "What is ugly *blesses your soul"; everything else is fine. A good theme, a nice tone and a breezy read for me. Keep it up!

The last stanza packs some real power. Thanks!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Tue Jun 17 12:48:26 2014

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My Review of Fake Influence by augustrush
Be more Confident!
I can see a lot of Pain in your words. But you must be happy that you know how to express it in Words. Many People doesn't have that Talent. Be more confident of yourself. Continue your hard work and Prayer. Slowly, but steadily, you will win. All the Best!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Tue Jun 17 12:39:35 2014

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My Review of Adventure by Zarathustra
Wonderful!
Fantastic Poem! You satisfied my senses. It is tough to find People with a flair for Words and I don't give 5 to anyone that easily. Brilliant Job! Keep it up!

P.S: How did People miss to comment on this before me? Surprising!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Tue Jun 17 12:34:26 2014

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My Review of REDEMPTION. by kitty
Needed Advice
I agree with your view. Everybody needs a revisit to their moral views. Self-Analysis and Realization are the two things which can give more awareness and enlightenment. Good Work!
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stellarram
Tue Jun 17 12:25:31 2014

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My Review of Killed By Love ? by M-Uselli
Expressive
Nice Work! A sense of Art is spread over the Poem; but you could improve it a bit more with decorative words. Good Job! Keep it up.

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Fri Jun 13 08:40:23 2014

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My Review of Felicity by jessyjjg
Appreciable
Good Attempt! But Please change the Background to a light color and the text to a darker color. Coming to the Poem, it depicts the Pain of a Proud Girl being left alone in a good way. But you can improve a lot by not letting the focus/theme of the Poem to wander and to add decorative words from your English vocabulary. If you read some of my Poems, I think they will help you. Keep it up and All the Best!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Mon May 12 19:46:12 2014

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My Review of Her Name Is Want by EltonCamp
Very Emotional
I don't give 5 out 5 rating to anything, unless they fall in the 'Best' category. This is surely one of the best. It really moved me. I can guess that this was taken from the life of a Girl whom you might have observed in close quarters. The choice of name which you gave for her, 'Want'; is a perfect one. I stumbled across this piece and I am happy that I did. Great work! Keep it up.
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stellarram
Sun May 11 17:05:23 2014

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My Review of times gone past by rouaster
Nice
This is a very well written Piece with a clear flow and excellent emotions. The Grammar rules were followed perfectly; except for the display of the title and the punctuation marks. Correct them and I am sure you can go professionally! ATB....
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stellarram
Wed Jan 8 16:27:30 2014

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My Review of Apocalyptic Era. by Veranika
Point Taken!
I agree with your 'Objectives' part but there are lot of loose ends to be tied from the almighty's end before the human community answer for their Sins.

Even if the World is gonna be destroyed, I won't call it as a complete demolition. God will always be targeting recreation.

Good to know your views. Keep writing!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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stellarram
Wed Jan 8 16:24:17 2014

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My Review of Dancing in the Rain's of Chance by TheSnowdog
Wonderful!
This is very pretty. Nicely written Rob! The flow, theme and the message are clear. Excellent! Keep it up.
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stellarram
Wed Jan 8 16:17:54 2014

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My Review of Yes by TheSnowdog
Well Done!
A well written piece where the mood was brought out in a way which you wanted! It can be improved a lot in styling. Also, the template seems to be an overused one where cliches can't be avoided. I can sense that you can really write better than this.

Keep up the good work!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.
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