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Fri Apr 28 23:05:40 2017

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My Review of Short but sweet by Aljosa
This made me go awww, the love that it tells of is so gorgeous and sweet. There's just a few little things here and there which look like typos, so maybe just give this a quick read over. I really enjoyed this; the last line just captures all of it together and really shows the everlasting nature of this love. Overall it was just so sweet.
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Fri Apr 14 22:37:39 2017

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My Review of 004. The Computer Prayer by Profanisaurus
This is very clever. It's a different take on the Lord's Praer but one that I wonder if many people would be hoping for their computers each day. Great poem, it gave me a good laugh.
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Fri Apr 14 22:36:13 2017

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My Review of 558. by Profanisaurus
This is an excellent point, and it makes me wonder, which way is it better to be rich in? I liked how showed both sides of these people, in their richness and their poorness, it was great poem to read.
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Archia
Fri Apr 14 22:27:36 2017

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My Review of Take Me by calsdarkembrace
I could imagine this as a song, it's got that feel to it. I enjoyed reading this and seeing the emotions of this person's love. I thought these two lines were great "Those blue eyes glowing in the dark/ Will be my light" I loved the idea behind that and I think it really added a lot more. Great poem.
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Archia
Fri Apr 14 02:51:37 2017

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My Review of hope you find by vivididol
Lovely poem, it did have a sad element to it but there was also that idea of wishing them the best and moving on, which was really one. The small thing that was a bit off-putting though are the abbreviations. 'u' should be 'you' and, maybe it's just me, but when I see things like that I feel that if someone doesn't go to the effort to spell properly then there's probably not a lot of effort in the poem. And I'm not saying it means your poem is bad or there's not a lot of effort in it, I know my own work is riddled with spelling issues, but it looks a little careless. That aside though I really enjoyed the meaning and the story in your poem. I liked the use of prince charming and the princess, and that fairytale idea it brough with it. The flow of it as well was really good. It was a great poem to read.
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Archia
Thu Apr 13 05:58:48 2017

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My Review of Never Shatter by Filmgirl39
This had a really nice flow to it, I could imagine it sung. I really liked the idea you used of comparing love to glasses never shattering. There's just a small typo in the least line. This is a just short poem,the flow's great and it has a nice meaning in it.
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Archia
Thu Mar 30 08:22:46 2017

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My Review of Wishing by Maelona
This is such a gorgeous poem, it's so beautiful. I loved the rhyme and I think it adds to the beauty of this poem because it makes it flow so smoothly. You painted such a beautiful picture and I could imagine the butterfly, and leaf and robin, it encompassed the whole feeling of nature. Very gorgeous.
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Archia
Tue Mar 28 02:23:39 2017

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My Review of Catching the Bus by RamSlade
It's so sublte and simple and it makes it so sad. It puts so much more impact in the end which, despite this being so short, is really strong. It's a great, simple poem but has so much more to it.
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Tue Mar 28 01:43:41 2017

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My Review of Perfection by Book-worm14
This came across as very deep and complex, with a lot behind it. I loved the idea of this relfection on the other side of the glass. My one suggestion would be to put some paragraphs in, it looks like you had the intentions of it, there's obvious pauses, so maybe something just went wrong in the formatting, but it would be easier to read. I loved the imagery of this beautiful person, and the rivers of tears, it was really great. Overall it was a great poem.
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Tue Mar 28 01:39:26 2017

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My Review of A Fine Dream by michaelgallatin
If only the world could always be a dream and we could spend our time laughing joyously amongst our friends and happiness. Unfortunately that can never be and we must all wake up from the sweetest of dreams. I really enjoyed your poem and for a moment being able to imagine this peaceful place. The poem was executed beautifully, it was great to read.
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Archia
Sat Mar 25 01:12:23 2017

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My Review of The Wounded Bird Becomes A Dragon by EdwinBozie
Reading this by itself, because I haven't read Dragon Zone or Dream Weaver, I really ejoyed this. I could almost imagine a character singing it to another. I liked how it started with the wounded bird still flying and then they emerged as a strong dragon. I did feel like the last part wasn't as hopeful as the part before it, perhaps I missed a point in it but it didn't seem as hopeful for the future as the idea of a bird becoming a dragon was. Still though this was a great poem and I thoroughly enjoyed it.
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Archia
Wed Mar 1 08:14:59 2017

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My Review of Computer Headache by matelotrod
This did give me a laugh. Once I get used to one type of computer or program I never want to have to change it. I have Windows 8 but I changed it so I could stick with Windows 7. Anyway your poem reminded me of that and the struggles with computers. There's always someone who just knows everything about them and it's so much easier to let them sort it out. It was fun to read a poem about a topic that was a bit different and I had to laugh about it.
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Wed Mar 1 08:05:49 2017

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My Review of Meet Me In The Stars by weemick1960
This was so beautiful, the expression of love that came through in this poem was wonderful. I did love the line 'Meet me in the stars' and how it was your key line. The idea of stars, and moonlight and dancing conjures up such a beautiful image. The rhyme also worked really well in your poem and it made it flow smoothly which made the poem all the more lovely.
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Archia
Wed Mar 1 07:56:54 2017

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My Review of The Sounds of Nature by loverofpoetry7
This really beautifully captured the essence of nature. I think expressing nature through its sounds is such a wonderful way to do it. Great haiku.
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Archia
Wed Mar 1 07:51:38 2017

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My Review of 552. by Profanisaurus
This is so odd and different that I think the only thing I can think to say of this is what it was fun. All the odd combinations (I'm trying to figure out what a sheep kangaroo would look like), make it something that is fun to imagine and put together. Structurally it was an easy poem to read and the rhyme was good. When put altogether I don't know if there's meant to be something deeper but I think it's a right bit of fun to read.
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Archia
Tue Feb 28 21:58:35 2017

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My Review of Second Best by smolderinglove
I think this is something that a lot of people have felt at some point in their life, and your poem really captured the feeling of it. It's not a nice thing at all and the awfulness of it came through in your poem. I enjoyed reading this, it had a good flow and pace to it which made it easy to read. Great poem.
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Archia
Tue Feb 28 21:49:22 2017

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My Review of Learning How to Use Scissors by Deluminary
I thought it was very clever the way you showed the progression of this person through their live, all with the same continual theme of them not being good with scissors. At first it started out quite innocent and it ended up quite sad. It was a really good poem, the common theme brought it along well.
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Tue Feb 28 21:37:53 2017

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My Review of On the Backs of Dragons by Jdover
I really enjoyed this story you told, I think you did really well to capture that feeling and idea of a great battle; it had that strength and hope and fighting for victory. It was a really good poem.
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Tue Feb 28 21:35:31 2017

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My Review of Im True To Myself by missamerica
This is such a good message about staying true to yourself and not changing for others. I really enjoyed reading your poem and it's definitely a good thing to remember in life. We don't need to try and be something else. Great poem.
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Archia
Tue Feb 28 21:30:20 2017

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My Review of Where Did All The Writers Go? by Silverblue
Oh where have all the writers gone? I wonder if this site is in decline. There are still some wonderful writers on this site, but there doesn't seem to be many new people. They had their update a couple of years ago where they looked like they were actually attempting to do something with this site but after that admin kind of disappeared. I don't think the forums on this site work anymore. There are though at least some people still on this site which is of course nice to see. I loved that you used a poem to say this, it's very clever and it was a good poem.

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Archia
Tue Feb 28 21:22:34 2017

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My Review of Long As You're Living by RobertRonnow
This is interesting. There's probably a lot more to it than I see when I read it and I think it's very open to interpretation. Some of the lines seemed a bti random but I liked the ending, I think it did help tie things together a bit more and it made it seem more like an overall poem. It's a very interesting poem to read adn think about.
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Tue Feb 28 21:02:40 2017

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My Review of Just To Be Social by Silverblue
Social media has a lot of rubbish on it but there's good things about it too. I think you did get across that idea of the negativities of it but also that it can a good, useful thing. I enjoyed reading your poem, it had a really nice flow to it as well. I don't think there's many poems out there about social media so it was nice to read one for once.
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Wed Jan 25 23:57:26 2017

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My Review of Night Shadows by Valentine
I love the idea that love lights the darkness and the shadows, I think it's a great way to look at it. This was really sad though, because the love wasn't there to bring light to the shadows. Great poem.
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Archia
Mon Jan 16 18:34:39 2017

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My Review of Counting Down to Dark by AlexHannah
I enjoyed reading this and seeing the different characters and I thought that it was clever how it started in the morning and progressed to the night, showing a snippet of each person's day. My one point to say though is that I was waiting for something to happen and nothing really happened. The end was a little flat because it wasn't really a resolution but another snippet of someone else's day. I do know that you only had 500 words, and I think you used the theme well in how it came to night, but I don't think there was enough of an event at the end to make it a satisfying resolution. That's just what I thought though, 500 words is a hard limit and I think you did well to get so many characters across in that space, and I don't think it was an issue that there wasn't a lot of description to them. I think it's better to focus on the actual story instead of the depth of the characters like you did. So all in all, it was an enjoyable story, if just a little flat at the end. I liked the small poem at the end though, and for how you ended it the last line was good because it shows that though their days are over the night is still going on. It was nice to see a little moment of each person's day as it came to night.
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Mon Jan 16 18:18:58 2017

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My Review of FRACTAL JESUS by Galacticbeam
This is really interesting, there's a lot of complexity to it. I'm not sure I understand what the main point is but it doesn't really matter, there's still a lot of little points that come across. This whole 'fractal' concept is an interesting one in this context and it raises some ideas. Great poem.
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