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richom
Tue May 23 05:14:22 2017

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My Review of Another year older (Birthday 2017) by JimSlaughter
This is my favorite of the poems I've read on this site this year. Rhythmic, wise, and not a single forced, artificial rhyme. "A little less certain that I've figured out what the reason for living so long's all about." Perfection.

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richom
Tue May 23 05:09:00 2017

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My Review of Just A Man by michaelgallatin
I see hundreds of them in visits to New York. But after reading your poem, I will view them much differently and sympathetically in the future, offering help where I previously passed on by.

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richom
Sun May 21 05:49:38 2017

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My Review of Cooked by caitlinjochitko
I am extremely old, so would be happy to know there is still some kind of a fire inside of me, whether lit by demons or not.
Excellent poem.
By the way, is there really a town in the US named Baraboo?

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richom
Mon May 15 06:24:04 2017

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My Review of Marking Time by JohnCreekmore
Bravo and amen. I see many contemporary octogenarians who are listlessly awaiting the end. I prefer and enjoy remaining active (writing, painting, traveling, playing online competitive scrabble, watching movies both new and old, taking long walks, attending sporting and musical events at our local high school, and enjoying dinners with friends.) Live!

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richom
Mon May 15 06:17:37 2017

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My Review of What to do, What to do by RamSlade
Indecision is an anchor. Best to take the plunge and deal with the consequences than live with lifelong regret that you didn't.

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richom
Mon May 15 06:13:06 2017

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My Review of Quiet Noise by BobQuinn
Wise words, indeed. I especially like your phrase, "the silent thunder of the truth." We are buried by media bombast, falsehoods, and propaganda. The truth is in there someplace, but is difficult to discern.

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richom
Mon May 15 06:06:05 2017

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My Review of Technology!! by matelotrod
I'm afraid it's a lost cause, Rod. Today's youth are hopelessly indoctrinated and addicted.
The last line of your first stanza reminds me of a speech that Bill Gates recently gave at a high school graduation. He spoke about how unprepared today's graduates are for jobs in the real world, which no doubt shocked the audience. Among other things, he said that business doesn't care about their "self-esteem"--that they should accomplish something first before feeling good about themselves.



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richom
Mon May 15 05:57:35 2017

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My Review of Tell The World by Silverblue
I continue to resist becoming involved with social media. No Facebook or tweeting of any kind. I see how enslaved people become by it, having to constantly check it and fretting that they won't get many "likes." I will happily remain a media hermit..

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richom
Mon May 15 05:51:33 2017

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My Review of Pointless Drivel by SketerMichaels
I'm afraid I have the opposite problem. Once begun, I have difficulty stopping and many of my poems become too long. Gardeners have the right idea: judicious pruning is usually beneficial and produces the maximum impact.

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richom
Mon May 8 15:28:08 2017

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My Review of I Scream For Ice Cream (This Flavour Anyway) by Silverblue
Vanilla was, is, and always will be my favorite. It's odd how some foods that are delicious as is can be turned into wretched ice cream. I devour fresh peaches, for instance, but think peach ice cream is abominable. Stick to the basics!

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richom
Mon May 8 15:22:36 2017

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My Review of Paint Me A Picture Green and Blue by vuriz
The kind of poem/prose I like best in that it has an interesting topic, is informative, and is well-phrased and constructed. The last paragraph is particularly thought-provoking. "The slower I live, the more of life I absorb." I agree with that wholeheartedly. An outstanding posting.
(PS: I once wrote a poem related to your first paragraph entitled "Go Green." If you have the time and inclination to read it, you 'll find it on my web site of poems" tweenverses.com)

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richom
Mon May 8 15:10:02 2017

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My Review of Mediclueless, a hypochondriac's lament by JimSlaughter
Excellent, Jim. Rhythmic and rhyming, amusing and clever.

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richom
Sun May 7 06:26:08 2017

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My Review of Still Lightfooting It by michaelgallatin
Though it hasn't happened to me, I think you've powerfully described what it must feel like when marriages break and a parent is separated from the children. I'm not sure, though, if all of them would endure the pain and "do it again."
I'm unfamiliar with Gordon Lightfoot, but will google his name and try to locate clips of him singing.

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richom
Tue May 2 16:53:20 2017

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My Review of Comparisons by JohnCreekmore
It is hard to judge ourselves objectively. One tends to be too harsh or too lenient when doing so. But if we can look at ourselves honestly, I think it can make us wiser (if not happier). Your last stanza is especially true. We do learn more the older we get, but are less and less certain as to the truth of what we learn. I question many things today that I was sure of in the past.

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richom
Mon May 1 11:48:17 2017

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My Review of Where are we going? by matelotrod
Global warming is real and will become even more severe in the future. I feel sorry for the future generations who will suffer its impact. I especially noticed your "why are we encouraging an aging population? Our children and grandchildren seem hell bent on finding ways to extend life or even eradicate death entirely. Who then will care for a planet of dotards? They delude themselves into thinking they can add many more years and still maintain youthful vigor and health. That is a pipe dream--a bill of goods that they have sold to themselves.
As for your birds, I suppose you will have to become as migratory as they are and follow wherever they go. There are worse ways to spend one's time.

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richom
Mon May 1 11:33:57 2017

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My Review of THE MEMORIES WE HOLD by kitty
I especially admired much of your phrasing: "Memories we try to retrace," "An album of feelings," "age plays a part."
As many of the older writers here have stated many times in many poems, memories are one of the blessings of old age, despite the ones that may be painful or regretted.
Well done again, Kitty.

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richom
Mon May 1 11:26:47 2017

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My Review of Wait For It (The Tube) by Silverblue
Sounds remarkably like our New York subways. And though the setting can be changed (New York amazingly go rid of the graffiti that once blighted theirs), I believe the answer to your final question is no--it will always be like this.
An outstanding poem. I enjoyed it not only for its content but also for the rhymed, metered construction and aaab stanzas. I did cringe when I saw the word "awesome" because that word is so overused in everyday slang (at least here in the US) that many other words would be less distracting. But that's just my opinion. I hope many WN readers will find, read, enjoy, and review your excellent poem.

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richom
Sat Apr 29 17:01:54 2017

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My Review of Rue by Silverblue
Outstanding. For elderly people like me, the jigsaw puzzle analogy is ideal in that some of the pieces have been lost along the way. Enough remain, though, to recognize what the whole picture used to look like. To revitalize your life, the challenge is to begin a new puzzle.

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richom
Thu Apr 27 12:14:35 2017

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My Review of Retire-Expire by matelotrod
You've also touched upon several stages prior to retire and expire--aspire, desire, acquire, and misfire.
I suppose we should be happy that our wives let us continue to hang around, with our functions being those of pet dogs or cats. They could probably get along very well without us, but what would we do without them?
I trust you've retained enough common sense not to show this to your wife. Some things are best kept to ourselves.

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richom
Thu Apr 27 11:57:56 2017

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My Review of Deals With the Devil by JohnCreekmore
The dilemma you pose may well have been seed for the expression, "Damned if you do, and damned if you don't." So if we're going to be damned either way, we might as well have fun and choose the way most wicked.

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richom
Thu Apr 27 11:45:20 2017

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My Review of Buzz by Silverblue
My bar hopping years ended many, many years ago, but I see nothing has changed. I remember doing and feeling all the things you describe so well. The morning after, I sometimes felt so rotten that I swore never to go to the clubs again. But the next time the opportunity rose, I eagerly joined my friends and (to use an old, old expression) painted the town red. A terrific poem for both content and rhymed construction.

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richom
Sun Apr 23 05:41:10 2017

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My Review of Wonderland Redux by JimSlaughter
I must confess that I was never as enthralled by "Alice in Wonderland" as most people are.
Clearly a deficiency on my part--the whole world can't be wrong. I suspect you are an investigative reporter, and I much prefer your imaginative, amusing accounts of what was going on. We seem to share the pleasure of rewriting old tales. Warped minds think alike.

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richom
Sun Apr 23 05:19:26 2017

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My Review of LITTLE KITTY by kitty
While reading, I had the same thought as John below--Is Kitty your cat or yourself? The description would seem to fit both. I'm glad you have such a wonderful companion. I regret to say, though, that I prefer dogs. Oh, well. To each his own.

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richom
Sat Apr 22 07:17:08 2017

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My Review of The Seasons of My Life by JimSlaughter
I've written several poems in the past on the same topic--the seasons of our life. Yours is excellent. They pass by unnoticed and all too quickly, but supply us with a trove of memories. Your last stanza is a splendid summing-up of how we should reflect on and accept our lives and deal with the time remaining.
I hope you experience a second springtime before writing your sequel.

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richom
Sat Apr 22 07:07:46 2017

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My Review of Has the world gone mad by matelotrod
You ask in your AN what's the point of complaining? Granted that it changes nothing, but it lets off steam lest we explode.
As to the question that starts your poem, the answer is no. It's not going mad--it has always been mad. I've just reviewed another poem that advises us to "go with the flow." For the sake of our blood pressures, I think that is the wisest course. Let the blighters (always wanted to use that good, old Brit's word) keep on screwing things up. Just have a drink, enjoy the sunset, listen to music, make love, write a poem about pleasanter topics, and let the world continue its headlong dash to human extinction. Won't be around to see the end, so, in the words of Alfred Neuman of Mad magazine, "Why worry?"


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