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RachelMurray
Wed Feb 14 11:36:49 2018

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My Review of RED MOON RISING by stephenb
Astonishing, I'm in Awe
"I am part of everything and everything is part of me" is such a wonderful revelation to have, realizing you are part of this world and this world is a part of you right down to your bones, through to your soul, and inside your heart. I'm not sure if I've ever felt this feeling before, and if I had it was very brief and didn't last, but I long for that feeling against, of being at one with things and at one with self at the same time. I think it really promotes a kind of inner peace as well as the awe you speak of, feeling kindred to things so foreign to yourself and yet so similar in different but distinctive ways. I know this poem is old and you'll likely never read this review, but I just have to say this poem touched me in the sense that there's still a chance of revival of the soul and that I can find this feeling of being part of everything and everything being part of me. I wish you the very best regardless.
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RachelMurray
Wed Feb 14 11:12:22 2018

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My Review of An Odd But True Friendship by michaelgallatin
A very endearing poem about friendship between two very different beings who've managed to connect and find a sort of harmony together in their wild, free likeness. Your words remind me that friendships can truly be born between the most unlikely of individuals and people, even if some would prefer to think otherwise. Still, this poem is very inspirational in its pureness and inspires in me a sort of peace so well done.

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RachelMurray
Thu Feb 8 10:00:42 2018

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My Review of Seep by Silverblue
I deeply relate to this
The way you describe everything, the comparisons to the sea and the color grey are just so beautifully written and tinged with a knowing sorrow, it's hard for me to even express it myself the kind of feeling this poem just seems to bring out in me. "Once I knew myself. The me that stared at me," oh I really like this line, it gives me the thought of looking in a mirror and knowing it's "me" staring back but not so much recognizing myself like I'm just a shell, a ghost of my former self with stolen features. It's strange, how much we change over the years and I'm only 18 so I still have so much time to change yet and there's a certain fear there in changing. And this line, "To carry on and struggle, seems to be our human role," there's a very sad, deep truth in this, that as humans we're expected to keep going on despite the invisible weight we carry. And, that as people, we're obliged to hide our issues, struggles and heartache from others with cheery plastered on smiles practically painted on our lips. It does seem, also, when we feel pain, both emotionally and spiritually, that it never will end. You make that feeling quite clear in this poem, a kind of hopeless despair that accompanies a life that will still keep living despite it and it's just wonderfully put into words so well done.

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RachelMurray
Thu Feb 8 09:27:56 2018

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My Review of Dark Thoughts by annalame
Your description of self-harm and depression is both simultaneously beautifully written and entirely harrowing. The descriptors you used of this hollowed blackened void you feel is absolutely haunting and makes me feel a flash of recognition for what I myself have gone through with depression. This is in the category of personal, so I am so sorry that either you or someone who you know has gone through this, even though I know all the sorry's in the world can't so readily fix suicidal thoughts or mental illnesses. I wish you the best either way and if your poem describes something you feel, just know you're not alone in this world and your work can draw light to things not everyone wants to see or talk about.
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RachelMurray
Thu Feb 8 09:18:03 2018

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My Review of THE BATTERED WIFE by willieb323
"Every life form must have rain, /But is there always a need for pain?" Oh, I very much like this line, this poem could do with some revising but I love your take on how emotional abuse can be for some people.
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RachelMurray
Wed Nov 15 15:25:34 2017

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My Review of Dreamer by chrome
GREAT!!!
Awesome!!!!
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RachelMurray
Tue Nov 14 09:18:52 2017

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My Review of Frame Work by ChorumAresus
Rather well written, the description of "Feeble bones, a skeletal wreck," is a perfect beginning to your poem, it instantly drew me in. Seriously great job on this, I believe you've captured a true aspect of a person struggling with depression and suicidal thoughts.
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RachelMurray
Fri May 12 11:31:23 2017

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My Review of You Were There by smitten25
Very beautiful and extremely heartfelt in so many regards. I think you should definitely show this to your father, I am sure he'd be over the moon about this and your talent. You put so much emotion into this that I think it really could benefit your relationship with him even further by sharing these feelings you have for him and what he's done for your family. I hope all goes well, I can just imagine the happy tears, congrats on having a wonderful dad in your life!
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RachelMurray
Wed May 10 10:37:31 2017

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My Review of Bluebird by OvertonWillis
Very pretty poem, it's a shame there aren't more Arts poems on this site because they are some of my favorites and all that I have read have been written so well. This included, you paint the perfect picture of what you are trying to convey. Of being trapped, freedom feeling cheap and false, while we fight onward inside yet never can fully escape what we've come to. I heavily enjoyed reading this, though I know I am reviewing much later than I should, very well done.
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RachelMurray
Tue May 2 08:52:11 2017

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My Review of Remembrance by ConorLarkin
If I was to say anything critical it would to perhaps make the stanzas longer? Regardless, the way it's worded makes it well enough but I had to try since you wanted something a bit critical. Though, I am an amateur myself so I wouldn't take things from me as set in stone if you prefer to write this way. It's good, so I commend you! The shortest poems always seem to get to be most anyway, so well done!!
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RachelMurray
Tue May 2 08:48:39 2017

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My Review of Radiants by Trudawn
So very well written in such short a poem. I marvel at how people can do that, make something so full of meaning in the least lines possible. You are quite good at your craft and I love poems under beauty. I know it's late in the game to be reviewing this piece but I had to say something after reading this. Very well done, honestly.
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RachelMurray
Mon May 1 13:34:08 2017

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My Review of Still There'll Be You by bickerstaffe
Very prettily written poem, I love to read the shorter poems that convey such meaning within their ink bled walls! I pray there always be a comfort in your life, but also to know you can be bold and strong all on your own! Others can help enhance it but I believe you have it in you to go beyond bounds. But love does make us feel stronger, so I hope you have your fill of it as everyone deserves!
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RachelMurray
Mon May 1 13:29:52 2017

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My Review of Passion Fruit by thomasrkingjr
This poem is very sensual and quite beautiful. The imagery is superb, even as I realize I am very much late in the reading of this for it being written so long ago. But, I confess, you write masterfully the arts of seduction regarding beauty and a fruitful love. Wonderful job, conveying everything so methodically.
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RachelMurray
Thu Apr 13 10:24:19 2017

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My Review of A Blink Whispered by odinroark
Very true, self realizing words. There is so much meaning in a simple phrase we often miss what we're reading. We see things so differently, introspective and knowing that we'll never see everything.
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RachelMurray
Tue Mar 7 13:03:06 2017

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My Review of BROKEN by clb520
So little, so much
So little said in words, but leaves a million words for the heart. Wonderful job!
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RachelMurray
Thu Feb 2 14:04:38 2017

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My Review of Leave Me Alone by LuxFalls
I thought this poem was very unique for being so short, I think you should make more if you feel up to it, it's a great concept! I like that you add in a bit of horror at the end and I think it can be interpreted many ways, I love the description. I hope to read more from you in the future.
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RachelMurray
Fri Jan 13 15:54:59 2017

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My Review of Power by JohnCreekmore
Power is indeed a dangerous thing to grasp hold of, for if you use it ignorantly you will surely perish in some inevitable way. There are few who have a right to posses it, and even fewer who posses it correctly when given the chance. You made a poem describing something that many people don't understand the danger of, so thank you, and great work of course.

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RachelMurray
Wed Jan 11 13:29:58 2017

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My Review of Let us set the world alight by terrygodwin
Very Positive
This is the second most positive poem I've read to day and I must say I am impressed by the way you wrote this and the subtle elegance it has within the text. I've never been a very cheerful person, never really seeing the beauty behind a storm, but this poem might be able to change that, for those that need the fire in your words. This poem looks like it could be under inspirational, because I found it to be just that. There doesn't seem to be much room for darkness in your kind soul, so thank you for this cherished poem, it really helps to put things back into a more idealistic viewpoint.

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RachelMurray
Wed Jan 11 13:24:32 2017

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My Review of How old are you? by terrygodwin
A very cheerful poem that some people might find overly optimistic, but it's a good thing to posses if you have it in your power to do so. To try and find the good in life and to be there for not just your family but yourself and strangers is a lesson not often taught to such a degree anymore, sadly. But, I believe with this poem, you have renewed a bit of that saving grace, that positive spirit and energy that has been exhausted from many a weary soul. I like the way you brought in all the references to age and time, it really puts your whole piece together to leave a poem worth admiring. Excellent job!

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RachelMurray
Wed Jan 11 13:16:20 2017

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My Review of I Imagine... by SilenceandSolace
Simply Put
Really a joy to read something like this when it's hard to come by such little treasures such as your poem. It's good to stay young for as long as you can before life catches up and forces you to change, to grow up. Great work!
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RachelMurray
Wed Jan 11 12:51:02 2017

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My Review of Between Heart, Mind, You & Me by NishA
Pleasantly Pleased
I loved the way you described the contrast between the heart's feelings and the brain's thinking. It was a definite difference, but in the end they were both dreading the same thing together, which I thought was quite brilliant of you. I like the way you schemed out the rhyming in a different way then most poems, so kudos for that as well. It's true that the heart usually wants something that the brain doesn't think they need. The inner battle was really something and very well written, spotlight worthy in my opinion!

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RachelMurray
Thu Jan 5 13:42:35 2017

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My Review of Planet Mars by sLeonard
Elegant
Such a pretty poem I must say! This looks like it could be so much more, I believe, if you decided to write more about this I'd love to read it. It's quite magical and very elegant, great job!
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RachelMurray
Thu Jan 5 13:37:24 2017

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My Review of Don't Judge Me. by Cat1991x
Ignore That Bad Review
Poetry has no true structure or way of being put into words. There are set ways, yes, but not every poem is put into a certain way. Poetry is subjective and it's based on how you feel and how you best want to represent it, which you have done quite nicely in my opinion. But it doesn't matter about other people's opinions all the time, and by reading your poem I can tell you already know that. That other person who gave you two stars obviously does not know how to give a correct critique, I apologize for their rather rude behavior on your courage to post an original work. Keep writing what you feel, you do not have to conform to the norm.
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RachelMurray
Tue Dec 20 13:44:40 2016

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My Review of Black and Blue by augustrush
Strength in your Pain
I've recently written a poem about PTSD, about my grandfather's fight with the stress after the Vietnam war. I had to do research on the topic as well as spend time around him, but from what I've read and seen PTSD doesn't just result from literal war, it results from a number of traumas. You did a beautifully versed poem of what that is, the pain you feel from the war you've faced can break a person just as much as an actual battlefield. Thank you for finding the courage to write about such things, many times people are too scared to do so, but I believe you have found some strength in your pain. The imagery is sad but quite well done as well, I applaud you.

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RachelMurray
Mon Dec 19 13:56:37 2016

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My Review of HEROES by seriouspoet
Truthful and Wise
You have spoken what many refuse to speak so props to you! It's true that people look up to the actors on T.V. more than the real life heroes before our eyes. Both the "ordinary" people who do the best they can to help each other out in any way and the soldiers over seas and veterans deserve more respect and appreciation for being who they are. We need more people to help brighten this world like King Jr. We need more people who are willing to be apart of the community of humanity and help our sometimes bleak cause. Courage is a beautiful thing that we all need, I believe. And your poem did an excellent job of showing what a true hero is!

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