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Burj Khalifa is born


Author: lalipenz
Created: January 13, 2011 at 05:09 am
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
Entry Stats: 4.25 Stars by 2 users with 2 comments 535 views
Burj Khalifa is born 
A spire
spears the sky

with fountains
dancing in

the cosmic
memory of lights

a frozen symmetry
of a dream

realized in
a spectacle

gaining height
with gleaming

fireworks
in their ephemeral

incandescent exposition
to purloin a little

limelight from
the world's tallest marvel



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SecretDrew
January 15, 2011

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Spotlight
A spire
spears the sky
with fountains
dancing in
the cosmic
memory of lights

I love these lines.... the rest is perfect too, I love how it finishes. Well done, really well done.
 Additional Comments (1)


lalipenz
January 15, 2011
(Creator) 		Thank you for liking it so much I wish I could accompany a picture with it but I don't know how to post pictures with poems but a pic would have killed the poem may be. luv and respect keep smiling have a great weekend



OrangeJuiceNom
January 13, 2011

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i really like this Really good write good job and keep up the good work
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lalipenz
January 14, 2011
(Creator) 		thanks thanks thanks






      

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