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The Newfangled Sky



Author: stellarram
Created: July 30, 2011 at 04:53 am
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Fantasy | Horror | Humor
Upload Stats: 5 Stars by 2 users with 3 comments and 397 views

The Conjurer  

He is going down the lane.
I'm right behind him.
Everyone thinks he is insane.
Because he acts on a whim.

He is my favorite Conjurer.
This is a mystic world of beliefs.
He tends to be a Bickerer.
Till I learn his secrets, I don't have a day of reliefs.

He stopped, I stalled. He turned, I hid.
He went into a lonely building.
I saw, he ran. I ran, he flied.
My heart didn't stop pounding.

The guard is already shot.
He didn't show any shock.
My mind is turning cold & hot.
He went in with a wide yock.

The night is so scary, he made it more creepy.
I followed him so slowly, an owl scowled from somewhere.
He went up the stairs, the path was so sloppy.
I followed him to the bedroom; I saw blood everywhere.

The Old man & the lady are already shot, but not dead.
Masked men are making their hay under moonlight.
Magician touched the pair & said "La Feurentina"
The injuries slowly started to heal in a manner of sleight.

I am still hiding behind the door.
Thieves started attacking him with a vendetta.
He pulled me on to the floor.
Touching my hand, he said "La Monsterratta"

I am seeing myself turning into a monster.
Their bullets hit me & went back.
Three human meals are given by my master.
After eating them, my stomach felt like a rack.

I am now back to be a man.
They thanked him in awe.
My master asked "Did you learn the secret?'
I replied him, "Love is the real magic".

He flied towards the moon.
May be I need to go to loo soon.

Stellar Ram
















Last Modified: January 20, 2012 at 04:23 pm
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Author Notes


The magic words used by the Conjurer are plainly my own creation. There is no real meaning to them. Also, the word "Yock" means "A loud laugh".

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Exxiesheartbreak
September 09, 2011
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Intriguing
This is quite intriguing...it held my attention right to the very last word my friend. There is something VERY special about the way you write. This is awesome! Exxie



(Author)
Thanks a ton Exxie. Your poems are looking scintillating to me & I didn't say this in a formal note. I have to learn a lot from you. I'm happy that you like my works & I'll try to get a similar good review from you, every time when I write.

 stellarram replied on September 09, 2011


You are an awesome writer my friend and thanks a million for the kind words, Exxie

 Exxiesheartbreak replied on September 09, 2011




Charice
July 31, 2011
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I like how you have turned your poem into a story as well.



(Author)
Thanks Charice. Well, thats my style of writing which is a bit unusual. You can also see my two other works, "The Shooter" & "Mr. Mystery". "The Shooter" is one of my best works till date. (I think so. ) I'm reading your poems. I'll share my views too, if you are ok with that.

I'm glad that you liked this piece. You can see more of mine in the forthcoming days.

Regards
Stellar Ram

 stellarram replied on August 01, 2011




user20962
July 30, 2011
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Hello! This has the potential to be a great work.There is so much thought and passion oozing out of this piece. I am not an expert in written English but I believe in saying how I see (I do hope this is ok) A poet needs to grab the mood quickly, and I feel the best way to do this is to avoid the little (connective words) as much as possible. Ie
Because he can act in a whim. (because he acts on a whim) or something like this.
I do honestly feel uncomfortable doing this but I figure we all join to improve our written art. I am offered advice on my works also and after all this is only my opinion.
Thank you Woo



(Author)
Thanks a lot for your review, Woo. It is always good to hear progressive feedback. I'll implement your suggestions in my next piece. The "Whim" correction will surely be made, because the poem itself is written on a whim by me. It is great to see someone sharing a similar passion in creativity. I request you to review my other work, "The Shooter" (which I think will be better than this) & share your comments. Yes, we have to collectively improve our act & I'll also try to put in humble suggestions in your works. You can feel free to comment on my works, I respect honest feedback. Thanks a ton, Woo.

Regards
Stellar Ram

 stellarram replied on July 30, 2011



      

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