Entry Stats: 4.5 Stars by 5 users with 7 comments 156 views
Yearning desires mounting
Embers licking the flames of my imagination
Driving me beyond that which is a semblance of control
What is, what was, what could be...
Bodies slick with passion
In that moment she holds my soul
Palpable rhythmic undulations
Derived from unrivaled temptations
Please, don't break me
Tastes of the divine
A look, a caress
Cradling her spent in my arms
Heaven sweetened with her scent
I am lost in her tears
At the pentacle, I awaken
Tentative moments of wonderment
Will I ever know...
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if you write erotica. This is fine stuff. I like the lesbian approach, and subtly crafted....the passion suggested rather than displayed. You might wish to check some of my own erotic efforts (clearly marked in my list). "Apotheosis of a Lover" is my best, if you have time for only one.
I'm enjoying my first visit to your page. Not sure if "pentacle"is your intention. Have a great time if you go to my own page again, Judy. I always appreciate readers with intelligent comments! :-)
Now this is where it's at!! "Tentative Wonderment"... very much superb, fractioned thoughts of passion, broken touches in abstract motion of your mind, a sensual fantasy that never gets to fully explore!, it's dellusional within itself!... your vocab and slow sensual kiss of emotions by each word and intertwined lines were gorgoues!... one of my fav lines= "Palpable rhythmic undulations
Derived from unrivaled temptations" this is very deep and really nothing short of flawless by design of buried romance between your heart's contemplative sheets, what idiot gave this 4 stars!!!???
5.0... this Is the best peice i've read from you simply because it shows you push into my fav territory and also the Imagery was great top to bottom. keep going!. Spotlight.
brandon, you humble me...i hope to live up to your critique. coming from a peer whom i respect, it means a lot to me.....thank you, buddy! you're the best *no, u r grruvy1* no, brandon is the best! *no, grruvy1, u are!* lol only with u could i have this kind of fun with a review....ty, brandon, fo being my friend! love you and mucho hugs!
A real wow moment !
I can honestly say I adore these gorgeous words of adoration in a moment of wishing for that moment.
Your word choice .to me is flawless.
It's works like this that inspire me even though love is not a genre I normally follow much as very often it's too predictable , this stands as a figure head of words.
If I sound enthusiastic I am, as this is lovely
you have definitely made my night! lol seriously, your comments and encouragement are kind and humbling. i've not been coming on-site very often recently, but it's feedback from peeps like yourself that make it all worthwhile. namaste, my friend
October 22, 2011
I'm glad that I have and as you can see my night was lightened by your work.
Thank you for actually replying also (some do some don't )
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