Would apreciate feed back


Author: william619
Created: July 08, 2012 at 08:14 am
Entry Type: Poem, A (18+)
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
Entry Stats: 3.75 Stars by 2 users with 2 comments 52 views

Would apreciate feed back 
Me:
shit this girls gone wild, showin me her tits I'm lovin her style, got me fuckin her with no rubber leavin that bitch my child, got her sister on speed dial, fuck her once shame on me fuck her twice shes happy see, move on to the next, shes sendin me a text, "see you again", naw bitch this is the end, I don't want no sloppy seconds

Infamous619:
sloppy seconds and thrashed thirds, lookin for more i give them the bird, they know exactly what they heard, I'm only lookin for a one night stand, get knocked i don't give a damn,

Me:
girls gettin naughty, givin me her body, drippin down drenched in sweat, that's how i make her pussy wet, girls rubbin it hoping to turn me on, rubbin my finger along her snatch so for now I'll play along, teasin her and she thinks she's doing the same, Nasty fuck I live up to my name, Doing things she never knew, beatin it up all the tricks she learned are new

Infamous619:
like masek this bitch lovin doggy style, that bitch go wild, and in the mean while, shes givin me dome, I'm settin up dates with bitches in my phone, 4 girls in one night, make that pussy loose when it started tight, but that's what happens when you fuckin Infamous619

Me:
I'm playin with her mind, oh how i love the way she grinds, shes fuckin me without a flaw, She don't know I fucked her raw, shit She's yellin my name, when your riding my 9 inch wouldn't you be doin the same, gettin her to scream, it feels so good she must be in a dream, shes 24 and I'm only sixteen, she don't know but she loves my hygiene, I'm fucking dirty but my appearance is so clean, holy fuck I'm flickin her bean, gettin her excited oh shit she's squirtin like a fountain, got that bitch peaked like she was a mountain

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Comments & Reviews

ladyanglican
July 08, 2012

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honesty
As much as it pains me to say this i have heard this myself in person from many people out on the streets. It seems to be the way of the world now a days. it represents the hooded street mentality well. The screw what i want when i want get what i want and screw the rest. You captured that perfectly. It reminds me of many things. thank you for your time and effort and sharing your take on something that happens way to often these days. its a good reminder to be strong and avoid falling into the trap of depravity. keep writing

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THEMECHANIC
July 08, 2012

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Good
I like a bit of dirt now and then. Makes my old heart pound

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