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The Newfangled Sky

Author: stellarram
Created: January 09, 2014 at 03:26 am
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Spiritual | Nature | Philosophy
Upload Stats: 5 Stars by 1 users with 2 comments and 445 views

A Holy Wait  

I went to the rim of the mountain ring.
Speckled Water from the fall gave the feeling of Spring.

He hid himself as a part of his antics.
My alter-egos are absolute fanatics.

To my right, I will witness his rays.
Today is one of my best days.

To my left, I perceive his blaze.
That splendid upshot takes away my Gaze.

I stare towards the Top.
My mind sought to hop.

I don’t want to put my eyes down.
Thought of missing him made me frown.

Rapidly, the entire cosmos was crammed with dense calm.
Stunning belief filled every realm.

Chirpy airborne Birds provided background music.
I did not feel unaided in the hub of this Jurassic.

He started to rise along with the mounting Sun.
I am lingering, roving and keeping my fortitude till the time he emerges.

There he is, there he is. He is calling me to blend with him.
Now I am surfacing….
I am surfacing as him.
I started becoming him.

© Stellar Ram 2014

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Author Notes

When I was silently observing the Sun Rise during one of my recent visits to a Forest area surrounded by hills, I experienced an unique feeling of Spirituality. I brought out the same in words here.

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Comments & Reviews ( X 5)

June 17, 2014
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I too have felt....
... the magic of nature in the splendour of the rising mountain on my recent trip abroad. I have written a poem giving life to the mountain range. You have put this picture across very vividly and taken your reader to a different dimension. Thank you, 'Steller'.

Thank you Kitty Mam! I really appreciate the time which you had taken for reading my work and appreciating me. If you like Spiritual works, I request you to read one of my other poems called "Design of the Divine"; which was one of my short stories written in a Poem form. I am sure it will satisfy you more. It is great to have reviews done by experienced People like you.

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.

 stellarram replied on June 17, 2014

My pleasure Stellar. I will go to that one although I am more for poems than stories. Busy schedule.

 kitty replied on June 18, 2014

January 09, 2014
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So far this was one of the well put praising of the Glory of Our Creator and God Father to the bleak and very young spirits of ours compare to many read both in Russian and English community of certain vastly pagan believes. Though i would erase Author Notes. Many would not understand that Sun was an inspiration just as one of the Created by the Divine Being wonders but not an object of spiritual significance on itself. Too much of such wrong going around and you know spiritual better of not adding bad advice to the fire.

Thanks a lot Veranika! You are right about the Sun being a Spiritually significant object by itself. Pagan or Catholic or Hinduism or whichever religion one may belong to; the spiritual feel is one and the same across all religions.

I really a lot of myself in you! Great to know about you Dear! Thanks once again for a constructive feedback.

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.

 stellarram replied on January 10, 2014


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