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The Newfangled Sky

Author: stellarram
Created: April 06, 2015 at 12:07 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Emotional | Spiritual | Inspirational
Upload Stats: 4.87 Stars by 4 users with 4 comments and 483 views

Sweet Pain  

I sway across the Ocean of pains.
I survive among vultures winging over my head, waiting for a chance to consume me.

I got to hold onto a ligneous log for support.
I named it as God.

That piece of wood is always inert.
But it surely knows when and where to take me.

I came across another air-bag which I got in the way.
I called it as Honesty.

It looked like a bag which was punched indefinitely.
It was still not destroyed; its assailants were nowhere to be seen.

I took a lot of faith from it.
Hence, I wore it on my soul.

Then I came across a trifling boat.
I hopped onto it and saw its name as Hard Work.

I used the “God” for rowing it.
I used “Honesty” as support.

The Sun came out and scorched the vultures with its heat.
It whispered me to follow the ray and way of courage.

I know I will not only get more vultures in my journey; but also an encounter with countless demons.
They will be in the form of hominids and their sensations; sometimes they will be in my own form as well.

Pains do disturb me.
Lost love, lost chances, lost lives, lots and lots of them....

But they never destroy me.
Because, I somehow smile at them saying that I don't regret my choices.

Right or wrong; all are perceptions.
Sin or not; that is what forms the judgment day schemes.

Who in this cosmos had not sinned?
Each and every one of us transgressed in our own way.

How rapid are we; in comprehending our gaffes and in amending our path?
When we reach the shore called Success; we will recognize our discomforts as Sweet Pains.

At that time, we will get the conviction to meet our maker in the eye.
The voyage does not stop at accomplishing success.

The destination is to reach a place called constructive history.
For that, we must get ready to swim another Ocean full of pains and gains.

© Stellar Ram 2015

Last Modified: April 06, 2015 at 02:28 pm
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Author Notes

A classical poem of comparisons which tells my philosophical views about Life and the pains it provides.

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Comments & Reviews ( X 8)

January 03, 2016
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This is absolutely beautiful!

Thank you Little Liar! Will try to maintain the same quality in my future works as well.

 stellarram replied on February 01, 2016

April 07, 2015
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a brilliant piece, in all it's parts. riding on waves of truth and honesty. very enjoyable.
peace ww

Thank you Willyweed for taking to appreciate my work! Enouragement from fellow writers like you gives confidence to produce more quality works. Peace and prayers to you as well!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.

 stellarram replied on April 08, 2015

April 06, 2015
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This absolutely astounding with your take on life, and as you speak of judgement calls it is the design of Hippocrates ignorance to believe such perfection exists. I love your open mind with achieving along the trials of life's sink and swim, this poem is truly in it's flight mode and deeply encompasses the spiritual truths of our path along the way. Life is about living and learning!

Thanks a lot BlossomWriter! I always enjoy interacting with like-minded people. I am really happy that you recognized the spiritual tone which is spread all through out the poem. You are spot on about Hippocrates. I am telling via this poem that we must not be Hippocrates; at least to ourselves. Thanks once again for your appreciation and kind words. I will ensure that my future works are also worthy enough of your praise.

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.

 stellarram replied on April 07, 2015

April 06, 2015
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Nicely rendered
A work filled with metaphor and imagery dealing with life's journey and our movement through it. As you say perception has always been the answer to our discomfort and feelings of victimization. We forge our own paths and bare the consequence of our decisions; this is the mechanism of learning. Nicely structured and expressed. Enjoyed!

Thank you for taking time to appreciate my work, Tony! Yeah, we are pulled down by the so-called 'Perceptions' in our lives. Learning never stops unless we find a better version of ourselves. I will assure that my future works also impresses natural writers like you. Thanks once again!

Warm Regards,
Stellar Ram.

 stellarram replied on April 07, 2015

My pleasure.

 TonyD replied on April 07, 2015


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