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Memories


Author:   bianca
Created: March 19, 2010 at 08:14 pm
Entry Type: Poem, G (All)
Category: Sad | Heartbreak | Non Fiction
Entry Stats: 10 comments 275 views
Memories

The night ticks by slowly
nobody is home.
Memories of you consume me
I am all alone.

Day breaks and its morning
must face another day.
Memories keep me trapped here
I need to get away.

The day rushes through me
There is no place to hide.
Memories constantly surround me
tears waiting to be cried.

Night crashes down again
and water falls break free.
Memories once again haunting,
forever imprisoned within me.


Author Notes
This was a poem I wrote a while back after my breakup :cry:


 

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Comments & Reviews ( X 8)

BeautifulHotGirl
July 27, 2012

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W.O.W
Nice flow.
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dragonflyrider
September 03, 2011

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It is heart felt poem about sadness. I enjoyed it very much. Keep on writing like this one. Thanks for posting.
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Dom1n1ck
November 29, 2010

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Indeed
The sadness here is profound and I also appreciate that it is a moment in time piece. It gives neither the before nor a hint to the after, simply capturing a moment in time in this case in it painful purity. It is very smooth reading and has a very nice meter to it as well. Very nice work. D
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total_bliss
July 23, 2010

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wow nice
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jcwhitman9
May 13, 2010

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very well written
Beautifully encapsulates the feelings of a heartbreak. Thanks for your words.
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JEdwardNolan
March 22, 2010

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Breaking even...
...the one thing I think I CAN cope with after a break up is the knowledge that I leave with more than I came. That I entered the relationship less knowledgeable, and left it all the wiser.

If that wisdom were money, it would buy a country. The wealth of knowledge is limited only to our understanding of the events that occured before, during, and up to the end. We may not truly be masters of our destiny, but we have a hand in deciding at least how to play t from the cards fate deals us. We can always draw, or fold, and get a new hand. If you walk away from the gambling table with what you came in with, or more, then you win.
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bianca
March 31, 2010
(Creator) 		You're lucky to feel that way. I, honestly, don't always have that pleasure. Sometimes I feel like I walked away with a lot less of myself than I started and lost parts of me that I may never get back. Other times I feel like, in the end, I gained. I guess it all depends on the day, and how I am feeling. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with me.



HPGreg
March 21, 2010

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Not easy
Breakups are not easy in life, I know this all to well. I wonder a lot about how things could be if only this or that had not took place. But I know that I can't live on the ifs, so I pick myself up and live another day. But one thing is for sure in life, you can't hide from the memories, for they will live on.
Thanks for sharing,
HPGreg
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bianca
March 31, 2010
(Creator) 		Indeed, breakups are not easy and those pesky memories that seem to come up at the most inconvenient of times are also not easy to deal with. Especially when the wounds are still fresh. Thank you for your comments and for sharing your thoughts with me!!

HPGreg
April 04, 2010 		You're very welcome and thanks for sharing.
HPGreg



Desmond
March 21, 2010

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A sad but well written piece and one that we can all relate to.
Loved the line 'tears waiting to be cried'
And we can feel that until all those tears have been cried - our life is just standing still.
Good work.
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bianca
March 31, 2010
(Creator) 		Thank you, Desmond! I appreciate your comments on this!!



Whiskurz
March 19, 2010

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Great Write!
This is a really great poem because the reader can feel pain that wrote this one......Whiskurz
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Mudkip
March 19, 2010

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Nice
This is a good poem. It really expresses what most people feel after a rejection. i think this is really good, keep it up!

Also, I'm sorry about your breakup. Feel better soon!
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