A Poem by jediallday

Author: jediallday
Created: June 26, 2011 at 06:20 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
Upload Stats: 4.5 Stars by 4 users with 5 comments and 234 views

If only I could write the world  

If only I could write the world

If only I could write the world
I could write the pain away
I would write a different future
And Id write a new today

I would write away the suffering
And write away disease
Then write punishment for evil
Bringing Satan to his knees

If only I could write the world
Id write a new song in our hearts
And every day wed sing as one
As the dawn of life restarts

I would write a world so pure
So clean and perfect and right
And write all danger from the skies
And write away the night

If only I could write the world
How much better it would be
My words would be the difference
In this world for you and me

Last Modified: June 26, 2011 at 06:22 pm
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Author Notes

If only the power of the pen could change the world and write a new history, a new present and a new future.

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Comments & Reviews ( X 4)

February 29, 2012
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This writing peice is very, very creative and completly understandable. I love how you wish for a better world and want to not make satin a part of it. Your poem describes what I wanna do to change the world....... GREAT job!!! You poerty really speaks to me, Thank you for that.

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June 26, 2011
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This is a beautiful write, it has a very nice flow to it.It really touched home with me as I am a caretaker of Mother Earth.She has been dealt a horrible injustice from the very ones who need her for their very existence.How sad it is...But,it is poems like yours that get the word out and plant the seed to begin to heal her wounds. Thank you for this.

Thank you so much for your kind review

 jediallday replied on June 26, 2011

June 26, 2011
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This is fantastically penned and VERY creative. Take care and keep that mighty pen you wield moving! Exxie

Thank you so much Exxie

 jediallday replied on June 26, 2011

June 26, 2011
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Bravo my friend....I am considering leaving this site....due to the various clicks that have now taken over the site......It's not about writing anymore....now it's about your name in lights....Nut I have to tell you this is by far your best write to date in my eyes.......Bravo my friend.......Whiskurz and SL

I don't necessarily agree with you about the name in lights thing. I don't think you should leave. Thank you for your kind words and for the inspiration you have given me when I first started writing on WN. Human beings tend to go with what's comfortable and people will always be drawn to others who share the same ideas, values and beliefs. It is good to see you work spotlighted, but that is not why I write. I write because to not write would make my life harder to take. In the real world I am surrounded by people who don't care about me (apart from my dear wife and kids) but on here people appreciate my words and my work and there is no judgement given I cannot handle.

Take care.

 jediallday replied on June 26, 2011

June 26, 2011
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this was really good and i enjoyed reading it!! please keep up the good work!!

Thanks again for reading

 jediallday replied on June 26, 2011

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