A Poem by slanfia

Author: slanfia
Created: October 23, 2011 at 08:17 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Psychology | Psychology | Nature
Upload Stats: 5 Stars by 4 users with 4 comments and 328 views

Unfed Nestling  

I was baby, openmouthed bird
I did not trigger your giving.
Something's terribly wrong...
Nature's rejection.

These are my true feelings:
Should I then fight them.....in all their biological might?

---Though they be strong.....Yes.... fight them.
Better yet, enclose them
In the breadth of your concern
In what you've felt for your own little ones
In your knowledge of larger truths.

The patch of red, signalling 'need'
Was not seen by anxious parents.

But Life today becomes your Friend
And your shame becomes softness of heart.

Last Modified: March 09, 2013 at 11:34 am
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Author Notes

....always looking for antidotes to painful memories.

The patch of red is on the roof of the mouth of baby birds. When they open their mouths to beg for food, it is the spot of red that stimulates the parent's instincts to deposit the food by aiming at the red patch. Without this visual it is probable that the feeding would never be successfully accomplished.

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October 24, 2011
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it stirs my heart...

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October 24, 2011
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A spotlight piece
Yes dear poetess, I agree with Woo in that your writing is 'interesting, top-notch and unique', you always have something important to share, something held subtly, yet with strong emotions, inside metaphors that resonate such deeper meanings within the reader's own heart. The title alone is so affecting, it bears such a vulnerability and goes against nature itself. Yet, my dear, in the midst of such a painful memory you show such a wisdom in your 'softness of heart'. I have so much to learn from you.

Thank you for your lovely review. We both have so much to learn from whatever the Source is that sometimes answers my questions. The softness of heart line is the answer I was happy to 'hear', in answer to my question of how do I handle these shame feelings. I felt so much better from the answer,... I thought I would try to share it in a poem, in case someone out there also struggled with similar worries.

 slanfia replied on October 25, 2011

October 24, 2011
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this is a beautiful poem and the last line is unforgettable

Thank you lalipenz. Unforgettable is about the best thing one could hope to hear. I doubt I am the source of the line you reacted to. I kind of 'received' it in answer to my question, and tried to share it in the poem. I myself try to remember this line whenever such feelings bubble up.

 slanfia replied on October 25, 2011

u r welcome dear

 lalipenz replied on October 27, 2011

October 24, 2011
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I always enjoy your writes, even this painful one as it is close to my childhood experiences of a mother who found it hard to react like one.
I found the patch of red an interesting (red spot) so to speak, where I paused for a moment as I visioned (and I'm not sure if it was meant in this tone, probally not) but I visioned a Robin as I see them as quite aggressive either in their mannerisms or just by the flash of colour.
I'm sure yet again my interpretation is slightly to maybe even more off course but that is how I see this work.
Another interesting, unique top notch write
Thank you for sharing

Sorry I forgot to mention I appreciated the soft tones of time at the end

  replied on October 24, 2011

Hi woo! I'm glad you related to something in the poem. Now I am not sure of my facts, but the red patch is an interesting thing. It seems that baby birds have a bright red patch of color inside their mouths, I think on the roof of their mouth, and when they beg to be fed, they instinctively open their mouth wide, and the parent with the food in it's beak, doesn't know what it is supposed to do with the food, until it sees the red patch, then its instinct kicks in, and it has a strong urge to deliver the food to the red patch. With no sight of red, (if the baby didn't have this coloration, or if the parent couldn't see for some reason, the action of feeding might never be completed. I found out about this when I tried, unsuccessfully to save a baby bird. I called the Wildlife Rescue for advice and that's how it was explained to me. I don't know if this is true of all species of birds, but I imagine it is. I agree with you that robins seem to be pretty aggressive birds. But is is always nice to see them as harbingers of Spring.

 slanfia replied on October 25, 2011

wow i didnt know that but it seems a recurring thing in nature that a flash of colour adds as a warning or in this case an instuction to feed.
we tend to go on sound and tears, as an urgeny to feed our young so that must be their, natural instinctive kick.
thank you for my new found knowledge of the day.
cheers Woo

  replied on October 25, 2011

Cheers! slanfia

 slanfia replied on October 25, 2011

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