A Haiku by Jiffy


Author: Jiffy
Created: June 24, 2012 at 02:16 pm
Upload Type: Haiku, G (All)  
Category: Haiku | General/Other | General/Other
Upload Stats: 4.71 Stars by 7 users with 7 comments and 288 views

Dancing dust  

Warm sunlight streaming
Through cracked neglected window
Shows dust motes dancing


© Jiffy - all rights reserved

Author Notes


My first attempt at a Haiku inspired by some rare sunshine :-)


 
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Comments & Reviews ( X 6)



Nouko
February 17, 2013
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Perfect imagery and composition. Great haiku. Best wishes.


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DeviantWriter88
June 25, 2012
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'cracked neglected window'

Thoughtful - there's neglect in perhaps letting in or the sunshine hitting that rare cornered window, but in every neglect there are cracks through which the sunshine has seeped in to illuminate the beauty within - 'dust motes dancing'

Beautiful


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heavenscentgirl1
June 25, 2012
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Beautiful...
Jiffy, this is a nicely penned Haiku. I see that you are new here on WN so I would like to Welcome you aboard by gifting you with 25 points to help get you started.

This is the second of your poems that I have read and am looking forward to reading many more my new friend.

Thanks for sharing this one with us today...

- heavenscentgirl1



(Author)
Thank you. I really appreciate you support and encouragement. It is great to connect with so many like-minded people :-)

 Jiffy replied on June 25, 2012




poetichuggybear1
June 25, 2012
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Wonderful!!!
This is as a Haiku should be with about three lines in the whole piece. you did a great job and it shows so well. Be proud of this piece and keep on writing and keep up the good work.


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LightestShadow
June 24, 2012
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It's very cute (: A happy little twist to the normal arts you will find on here. I like it


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Azrielle
June 24, 2012
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Haiku magic
visualizing evewry line luv.. that sunshine creeping through the cracddk.. wonderful words of Haiku magic.. SL


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Cat1991x
June 24, 2012
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Great work.
Only a few lines but yet i was still pulled in by every word. Would love to read more. Well Done. Keep up the great work!


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