A Poem by Kilos8


Author: Kilos8
Created: November 18, 2015 at 03:36 pm
Upload Type: Poem, T (13+)  
Category: Suspense | Personal | Adventure
Upload Stats: 1 comments and 326 views

Daybreak

Sway the vessel, onto Daybreak
The scarlet ends, as far as the hand reaches
My dearest of dears, follow the horizon
Set watchman upon the walls

I long, oh I plea for stillness
I plea, oh I long for balance
This vessel sways across the waters
It drawls me in, memories have taught us

The silence, sways across my shoulders
Drips down as dew upon my forehead
The morning brings forth a silence that breathes
A scarlet bird hops upon the oar singing

“The tree burst forth from the roots,
Its fruits plentiful and full,
As the light shines forth, the crown sways
Oh dearest of dears, follow that Daybreak, follow that Daybreak”



Last Modified: November 18, 2015 at 03:39 pm
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ThePriestess
January 25, 2016
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Hello my name is Timmie, it is a pleasure to meet you. This is the first piece of your writing that I have gotten the opportunity to read. Thank you for sharing. Clap clap to you my friend, you have penned a keeper here. I love the way your metaphors drip into each other, very clever indeed my friend.
You are asking for a critical review, otherwise I would probably not say anything. I hope what I say does not offend you, as that would never be my intention.
I would first like to say that I enjoyed your poem very much, however, there are a couple of technical issues.nhjjjjjjjjjjjklj
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