A Poem by a112yearoldman


Author: a112yearoldman
Created: March 20, 2017 at 07:04 pm
Upload Type: Poem, M (16+)  
Category: Love | Peace | Free Verse
Upload Stats: 3 comments and 74 views

Whispers

take me deep
inside your heart
from where
is no escape

leave me near
your tender voice
warming breaths
through the wind

caress my spirit
with your gentleness
pure sensitivity
with romance

free my heart
from all its worries
lacking what peace
is in you

take me inside
your passion
your innermost
quietude

make ready
my most gentle bed
inside your graciousness
provided

as your warming hands
touch and caress
my soul deeply
inside my heart
taste of me so gingerly
as to not ingest
that which became me
in my youth

bring me to
your deliciousness
placating both of us
inside each other

peace and passion
sweetly displaced
from where they lurk
in whispers of life


Last Modified: March 21, 2017 at 04:17 am
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Comments & Reviews ( X 7)



pnknucklez
March 23, 2017
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The whispering heart speaks in volumes in your amazing poem Donald, i am sorry i have been absent for the last few weeks. I see your passionate side explode in little staccato phrasing, powerful and punchy lines sensually move this poem to a beautiful end. SL~Paul
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(Author)
Paul, your revisitation to my side of the world is greatly appreciated. Your words bring a pure satisfaction to me this morning in your beautiful appraisal of what my heart has written.  Thank you , my dear friend.

 a112yearoldman replied on March 24, 2017




Littlesong
March 22, 2017
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This one is filled with romance and spirit, tenderness and sweet yearnings, a sweet plea sung from Your loving heart, wonderful one.
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(Author)
Little Song, you make my heart blush with your beautiful words!

 a112yearoldman replied on March 22, 2017




Constance_
March 21, 2017
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dreamy
Well, I guess you want critical reviews so in your first stanza, 4th line, to me it would read better as - there is no escape. but other than that, I think you poem is lovely as written.
applaud



(Author)
You are so appreciated for your time in reading and reviewing my words, and for your counsel and positive words!

 a112yearoldman replied on March 21, 2017




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