A Poem by vivididol

Author: vivididol
Created: April 13, 2017 at 06:52 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
Upload Stats: 4.5 Stars by 2 users with 2 comments and 184 views

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If ur not gonna be the reason,
don't u be the one who steals from me;
i guess we both have someone else to be.

i have given u ur freedom
because i don't do ultimatums;
i guess u found some better company.

i wish u well, my darling.
I hope u find ur own Prince Charming;
i hope the Princess in the Tower remembers me.

This poet will shed another skin and
look to find a new beginning;
hope Love is not confined to history.

I know that life's a journey;
u don't owe me but u didn't earn me.
I hope the path u take will set u free.

I wish u well, my darling.
Ihope u find ur own Prince Charming;
i hope the Princess in the Tower remembers me.

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June 15, 2017
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I see you walking along a dirt road with trees all around and you are saying good bye to her...you cant have a healthy relationship when someone steals from you...sounds like you still love her...if you love her let her go...
(who is currently dead)

thank you once more for taking the time

 vivididol replied on December 26, 2017

April 14, 2017
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Lovely poem, it did have a sad element to it but there was also that idea of wishing them the best and moving on, which was really one. The small thing that was a bit off-putting though are the abbreviations. 'u' should be 'you' and, maybe it's just me, but when I see things like that I feel that if someone doesn't go to the effort to spell properly then there's probably not a lot of effort in the poem. And I'm not saying it means your poem is bad or there's not a lot of effort in it, I know my own work is riddled with spelling issues, but it looks a little careless. That aside though I really enjoyed the meaning and the story in your poem. I liked the use of prince charming and the princess, and that fairytale idea it brough with it. The flow of it as well was really good. It was a great poem to read.

thank you for taking the time to review, ur time is much appreciated. with regard to those particular spellings it is something readers will just have to put up with because i "went to the effort" of deliberately using those spellings. it is a little quirk of mine that i don't intend to change 

 vivididol replied on April 14, 2017

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