A Poem by SketerMichaels


Author: SketerMichaels
Created: April 16, 2017 at 04:16 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Spiritual | Religion | Emotional
Upload Stats: 4.62 Stars by 4 users with 4 comments and 129 views

Hosanna  

Not in the temple.
Not in the mountains.
It is here,
Your Word has come to us
Dressed in flesh and blood! 


Your sanction of peace,
From the woman’s womb,
Walked burdened
In the plain sight of man
Preaching the Good News! 


Disguised as the poor,
Light’s humble stature
Crossed this Earth
Greater than the shadow
Of prophets and kings! 


Despised and smitten,
Taken for a thief,
Mocked and nailed,
Wind and wave's command cried,
“Father, forgive them.” 


You are of the Psalm’s
Astonishing lines
Angels sing
In ecstatic meter
From an empty tomb! 


Myth that became fact;
God greater than god,
Before all,
Laying the foundation
Of this mystery! 


Your truth is revealed.
Heaven has come down.
Its name; love.
What Your will has now done,
The grave cannot hold!



Last Modified: April 16, 2017 at 09:40 pm
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Author Notes


I wrote this before church this morning. I know people will consider this to be some sort of religious piece, but I consider religion to be what occurs when spirituality divorces itself from the reality which authored its creation.

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Comments & Reviews ( X 11)



Littlesong
April 19, 2017
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You MUST write more before church, because it seems to bring out the VERY best of You, such beautiful profound piece, a momentum of real spiritually and existence, walking into the depths of cores, just easily powerfully... I wish I could write it the way You did, a real masterpiece, thank You so much for sharing it with us.
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(Author)
Thank you once again Little Song! I have to write whenever I can find a quite moment. Sometimes that's before church but often Sunday morning is as chaotic as any other time. I'm pleased that this touched you.

 SketerMichaels replied on April 20, 2017




kitty
April 19, 2017
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Apt and fitting!
Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece. So profound!
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(Author)
Thank you Ms Kitty! Your read and comment are very much appreciated!

 SketerMichaels replied on April 20, 2017


Don't mention!

 kitty replied on April 20, 2017




richom
April 17, 2017
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Although I prefer rhyming, I admire both your message and the metering. I notice that you've used 5 5-3-6-5 syllable pattern for all five lines of each stanza, and the metric cadence is very appealing. Much as is the case with the psalms you mention..Some of the psalms are the most beautifully written passages ever.
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(Author)
Thank you so much Richard for the kind review and comment, and also thank you for noticing the syllable pattern. Most people don't pay attention to such things in an unrhymed poem but I as often as not incorporate something like that in my free verse efforts to produce a certain feel or if nothing else to keep things on the rails a bit when I have a specific direction. 'Psalms' is exactly the tone I was going for in this instance. 

 SketerMichaels replied on April 17, 2017




JohnCreekmore
April 16, 2017
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Easter piece
I am a lover of spare, brief lines that nevertheless carry impact within them, and this offering certainly fits the bill. Every octet is filled with meaning and gets that meaning across more forcefully than many of the flowery, verbose efforts I have seen. I like especially verse 6, with its emphasis on myth and mystery. The only correction I find necessary also comes in that verse, where it seems "became" would be a better choice than "become." Otherwise this one is a fine tribute to this Christian holy day.
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(Author)
Thank you Mr. Creekmore for your fine comment and review. After reading your Easter poem the other day I was reminded for some reason of an essay by CS Lewis called 'Myth Became Fact' that got me going on this piece. I even started to message you and recommend it for your reading. It's pretty short and you can google it online if you're interested. I've always been a fan of both Lewis' fictional and theological writings (actually they overlap quite a bit). I don't know how acquainted you are with his work, but he seems like someone you might enjoy.

 SketerMichaels replied on April 16, 2017


(Author)
Also thanks for spotting my typo. I don't know how I missed that one.

 SketerMichaels replied on April 16, 2017




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