A Poem by Stella


Author: Stella
Created: April 19, 2017 at 04:18 pm
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: General/Other | General/Other | General/Other
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The Music Played ~ trijan refrain  

In haunting tones a clarinet
just stole my heart away,
I heard it on the night we met
and thought of it today,
so sensual so calm and sweet
this music made me feel complete
so sensual
so sensual
I knew again that we would meet.

 A saxophone played on our date
in the place where we dined,
I recall I was very late
you laughed and didn’t mind,
soft sultry tones then set the pace
you kissed my eyes and stroked my face
soft sultry tones
soft sultry tones
to which we had our first embrace.


 Quivering strings weave ecstasy
they cry in sorrow too,
memories rise inside of me
of  yesterdays and you,
violins played the night we danced
seductively we were entranced
violins played
violins played
beneath the moon whilst we romanced.


© Stella Armour 15/10/16


 


 


 


 


 


 


 



Last Modified: April 20, 2017 at 02:41 pm
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Author Notes


The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4,4 refrain/8




 
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Comments & Reviews ( X 4)



JimSlaughter
April 20, 2017
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Let's face the music and dance! A lovely, melodic, and romantic piece, Stella. I'm glad you added violins...my second favorite instrument. Question: are lines 2 and 3 of Stanza 2 lacking a syllable? They don't read as smoothly as their counterparts in the other two stanzas.
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(Author)
you had me sweating for a moment there Jim as I added this poem to my latest book, but when i checked the syllable counts are all ok .There was a mistake in the last stanza to be truthful but I must have copied this from a draft because it right in the book...thank goodness lol.

 Stella replied on April 20, 2017




Silverblue
April 20, 2017
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Very nicely put together with a smooth flow and good imagery. Was good to read the author notes too - helped explain how the poem was composed and put together. Very nice.



(Author)
Thank you so much for your kind comment

 Stella replied on April 20, 2017




Littlesong
April 20, 2017
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I remember reading this sweet romantic piece of Yours, the tune is still so soft like the breeze, haunting with its gentle refrains, thank You for posting it again, and for giving us a poetic lesson, much appreciated!
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(Author)
Thank you littlesong, i really love this form, it is delightful to work in..

 Stella replied on April 20, 2017




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