A Music by TempestOfNature


Author: PRO TempestOfNature
Created: April 20, 2017 at 08:58 pm
Upload Type: Music, G (All)  
Category: Music | Music | Music
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Control Your Life  

Control Your Life


Copyright(c)2017 TA


4/14/17


 


It's hard to be me sometimes
My heart like an ocean
Flowing through emotions 
"Let go of the world outside"
Open to dangers
Wanting to control your life


Some days I do feel
Why the hell its so real?
Sometimes I let go
Just to go with the flow
Inside


 Turning the wheel
Refusing to heal
My mind
Losing control
Having to hold
The lies


 It’s hard to be me sometimes
Discarding the armo
In-between all the wonder
The world is so cold outside
Open to dangers
Waiting for your sacrifice


 Some days I do feel
Why the hell is so real?
Sometimes I let go
Just to go with the flow
Inside


 Losing control
Refusing to fold
The tides


Coming to terms
Confronting the world
Outside


 Some days I do feel
Why the hell is so real?
Sometimes I let go
Just to go with the flow


If I knew then, what I know now
I would face my fears but I didn’t know how
Have I lost my way? My change to chance?
Some days I do feel
Why the hell its so real?


 It's hard to be me sometimes
My heart like an ocean
Flowing through emotions
"Let go of the world outside"
Open to dangers
Wanting to control your life



Last Modified: April 21, 2017 at 01:28 pm
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Author Notes


A long time coming! Hello everyone I am back and I look forward to writing some more along the way.


 
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Comments & Reviews ( X 5)



richom
April 22, 2017
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Although there are times when one must and should resist injustices, I've found that the smoothest ride through life is to simply "go with the flow." Don't sweat the small stuff--save your wrath for only what's truly important.
I believe this may be the first time I've seen your writings and I'm curious as to your labeling it music. Are they written to be song lyrics and is there music to accompany it? Or do you mean that all writing is musical?
By the way, one of the last places I would have expected to find a TempestOfNature is Brooklyn. I've visited Manhattan dozens of times, but never Brooklyn. I'll have to make that a part of my next trip to dispel the old movie depictions of Brooklyn.
You say you have just come back. I'm looking forward to more of your poems.
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JohnCreekmore
April 20, 2017
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Psychological musing
This work comes across like an inner conversation, the way we talk to ourselves when in introspection about our lives. The speaker seems to be someone who is a survivor, one who has dealt with considerable past difficulties and is faced with uncertainty now. I get the impression that she was previously in some kind of out of control situation and is now very self protective to avoid a repeat of that time. The last line, "Wanting to control your life," sums it up. I also get the feeling that the speaker has been mistreated in some way by others, but acknowledges some personal responsibility for whatever occurred. The poet plays it close to the vest here, so we never know exactly what happened, but we are very curious. The spare, unadorned lines add to the mystery. The only correction I would suggest concerns the repeated phrase "Some days I do feel...?/Why the hell it's so real?" It seems to me that it should be punctuated with a period instead of a question mark. Otherwise, this is quite an interesting piece.
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