A Poem by michaelgallatin

Author: michaelgallatin
Created: April 21, 2017 at 11:54 am
Upload Type: Poem, M (16+)  
Category: War | Despair | Heartbreak
Upload Stats: 4.5 Stars by 2 users with 3 comments and 147 views

Children's War Rhymes  

Let's sing a song of napalm,
a pocket full of blood.
Four and twenty dead kids
lie still there in the mud.
And when their bodies molder
it is an awful thing.
Their mouths are closed or broken
so no longer can they sing.

It's way beyond scary
and you're feeling contrary.
So how does
your death garden grow?
With mortar shells
and dying yells.
And tiny corpses
in a quite splendid row.

The little mourner
sat in the corner.
While he watched
his loved ones die.
He felt very numb
and was struck so dumb.
That he even stopped
wondering why.

Michael "If God Is Seeing This, Please Help Us!" Gallatin

Last Modified: May 12, 2017 at 10:49 am
© michaelgallatin - all rights reserved

Author Notes

Something different to add to my continuing litany of anti-war poems.

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Comments & Reviews ( X 8)

April 22, 2017
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Very creative adaptation of nursery rhymes to illustrate the ghastliness of war. Very good pacing, unique rhymes. Well done.

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April 22, 2017
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Clever, effective
You've somehow expressed the deepest frustration in a whimsical way - clever. Thank you Michael.

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April 21, 2017
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Michael, my "fractured" nursery rhymes attempt to put a smile on a reader's face. Yours put a great big lump in this reader's throat. These are heart wrenching...and extremely well done.

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