A Poem by fraido


Author: fraido
Created: May 16, 2017 at 07:25 am
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Environment | Peace | Nature
Upload Stats: 5 Stars by 2 users with 2 comments and 106 views

The Guardian  

Immovable patience,
watching waves & tides.
Gentle breeze,
raging seas,
sculpts his face,
through time.

Bodies wrapped,
then bare skin,
clamber on rock
as summer begins.
Unsteady feet
starting to slip,
fingers deftly
searching for grip.

Gulls glide,
in blue skies,
perch on top
as the sun dies.
The Guardian presides,
over all,
it surveys.
A perpetual sentinel,
along,
the causeway.


© fraido - all rights reserved

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SketerMichaels
May 20, 2017
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Very nice
I like the flow and style of this one. To me, this is a good example of how a loose structure can accentuate the subject. The varied rhyme and meter very much serve to mimic the "Guardian." I can see how someone might infer more meaning from this piece, but then again it is just as well to read along and take a climb up those jagged rocks following as the authors steps along off set lines. A good write and an enjoyable read.
applaud


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JohnCreekmore
May 17, 2017
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A Presence
Because the word "Guardian" is capitalized, the first impulse is to assume this sparely worded, well thought out poem is about God, which may be the case. On the other hand, none of the personal pronouns mentioned are capitalized, which is the customary practice when discussing the Divine. Also, we are told the Guardian's face has been sculpted by natural forces over time, which gives the impression that some kind of physical landmark is being described. Finally, this presence is called "A perpetual sentinel,/ along,/ the causeway, which I am guessing is an actual location. It seems to me, then, that "The Guardian" is some sort of great rock by the sea, which, though affected by the elements to a degree, has remained essentially unchanged. Of course, this very steadfastness could be seen as a symbol for God. Whatever, I liked the work greatly, as much for what it doesn't say as for what it does. Good work.
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(Author)
Thankyou very much. Yes the subject is a minor landmark on a rocky beach I've known since childhood. I never appreciated the religious connotation, and find them intriguing.

 fraido replied on May 18, 2017




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