A Poem by ChorumAresus


Author: ChorumAresus
Created: November 13, 2017 at 11:32 pm
Upload Type: Poem, M (16+)  
Category: Sad | Suicide | Despair
Upload Stats: 4.5 Stars by 2 users with 2 comments and 16 views

Frame Work  

Feeble bones, a skeletal wreck
I have no way of making hope out of it
Wade into a dark pool for safety
Place a hand on any form of sincerity

A thumb on my pulse
But the blood is so vile
Keep the ideal loose
And the pistol ready all the while

I've given up on humanity
One more turn of the dial and I'm done
Knowing everyone will be better off without me
There is nothing left but the gun


© ChorumAresus - all rights reserved

Author Notes


Been so long since I've had the opportunity to post, long story short, life sucks.


 
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Comments & Reviews ( X 3)



lyrycsyntyme
November 14, 2017
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I hope you can find a way to see beyond the now. Beyond the gun, beyond even what waits inside it's chamber.

Your first stanza, particularly, shows a real talent ("place a hand on any form of sincerity", for example), but more than that it shows just how much life exists inside you, still. Not for a dead spirit can such words come. Hang on. You'll be worth it.
applaudapplaudapplaud


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RachelMurray
November 14, 2017
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Rather well written, the description of "Feeble bones, a skeletal wreck," is a perfect beginning to your poem, it instantly drew me in. Seriously great job on this, I believe you've captured a true aspect of a person struggling with depression and suicidal thoughts.


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