A Poem by Patty8743


Author: Patty8743
Created: November 05, 2009 at 08:45 am
Upload Type: Poem, G (All)  
Category: Despair | General/Other | General/Other
Upload Stats: 4.5 Stars by 3 users with 4 comments and 280 views

Swallow  

Take another pill
Fucking white pills
Little white lies.
And I swallow it
Like I do everything.
Letting it build
Trying to hide
Running scared.
Inner demons
Darker voices
Whispering
Caressing my soul
Or ravishing it.
I'm at a loss
To understand
To comprehend
To swallow it all,
The wretched bile,
The hate, the fear.
Smile
Always fucking smile
Through the pain.
Swallow another lie
Another white pill,
Swallow it whole
As you beg for death.


© Patty8743 - all rights reserved

Author Notes


Pills are nothing more than band-aids. The cover the wound but don't cure the scar. Some people don't want band-aids. They want cures.


 
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Comments & Reviews



daughterofagoth
November 06, 2009
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This poem was amazing, not least because I can relate. I am at a low point right now and this totally helped. It's like a balm but I desperately need help to get through. Thank you.


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zoelouise
November 05, 2009
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thats amazing, I love your writing.
I love how you wrote it as short sentances, really dramatic.


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Dom1n1ck
November 05, 2009
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Cool
Very interestign piece, with a lot more to say that it appears at first glance. Nice phrasing and the structure lends itself well to this idea, teh short stabby lines drive the drama home. The tenor and feel of this work as well. Nice work. D


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basketball
November 05, 2009
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It's really good when you compared swallow the white pills with despairation. It's a really interseting poem. It is free of spelling errors. Please... please... please, use appropriate words next time.


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